Mastermind feat. Rhianna-Run this town 2 freestyle (my rap)

**laserboy1134** · 11-21-2009, 08:23 PM

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**TrakMastaTom** · 11-22-2009, 03:47 AM

Heh...OK. Constructive criticism.

Your flow is off on several occasions. Rhymes were simple, which if this is an off the dome freestyle is fine, but it sounded to me like it was written.

All that being said, I really hope you stick with it dude. When I first started rapping I was awful. In fact I have some really really bad tracks I made when I was 13 or 14 still on my computer. So keep at it, listen to the best emcees, write a lot, rap a lot, and keep it real.

**DrunkN** · 11-22-2009, 04:48 AM

It was alright, better than I could probably do. I agree with TrakMasta though, the song was a bit unbalanced at times.

Come to think of it, I don't think I know of any rappers who are Jewish.

**laserboy1134** · 11-22-2009, 11:06 AM

@ TMT

Thanks for the criticism. I was looking over it and I hate how I lost track a lot of times.

@ DN

1. Beastie Boys- I know that's not the type of rap you mean, but still.

If you're talking about the newer pop rap, then Drake is a jew.

**TrakMastaTom** · 11-22-2009, 01:11 PM

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Originally Posted by laserboy1134

@ TMT

Thanks for the criticism. I was looking over it and I hate how I lost track a lot of times.
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Just keep practicing, dude.